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Later that evening back at the cabin, the three were looking over the artifacts they found around the ruins in their secret underground study. It was located underneath the kitchen floor with the entrance to it covered up by a rug. The study contained books, past found relics, pictures of the site, and notes which were used to analyze and theorize the true history behind the ruins.
Currently, Wata and Madge were cleaning up the newer relics, while Josias was keeping little Ackee entertained by bouncing her on his leg.
“Man, you guys really hit the jackpot this time” Madge said as she was cleaning up the last of the grime.
Wata nodded in agreement, “Not to mention we really got some good pictures of the text and the markings surrounding the ruins.”.
Madge looked at the section of the wall that held the pictures of the underwater ruins, and pondered about her country’s connection with the Void Century. It was something that always kept her up at night, and wondered what the government could possibly be hiding to make it a criminal offense to even have the capability of reading it.
She remembered how her parents once studied with the archaeologists of Ohara or as the world knew them “The Demons of Ohara”, and at one time were going to be taught the language by the clan itself until the Ohara Incident happened.
She then thought back to Pimiento and his gang, and cringed, “Today’s incident shows everything wrong with this world. We have to take risks to learn about the history of our island, while people like the Vanes can walk around in public openly promoting a practice that was supposed to be banned 200 years ago.”.
Wata sighed as she put down her relic on the table, and placed a tender hand on her sister’s shoulder. She did her best to give her some comfort,” How about we go to Meizi’s Tavern tomorrow, and give ourselves a day off?”.
Madge ears perked up at the suggestion, and she enthusiastically said,” Yeah, it sure would be good to hang out at our favorite watering hole and give our favorite friend a visit."
“Okay, then it’s settled you and me are going out tomorrow for a sisterly bonding experience, if Josias doesn’t mind” Wata said cooing in her husband’s direction.
Josias looked up from playing with his daughter, and responded back” Sure, I don’t mind watching Ackee all day by myself, you go spend some needed time with your sister, sweetie”.
Wata chuckled, “I’m blessed to have such a good understanding husband like you.”
Madge squirmed at her sister and brother in law’s gushy display of affection. Sometimes, she wondered if it should be illegal for couples to be that affectionate to each other.
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The next morning, both sisters got up –in Madge’s case, she was forced up, had breakfast with Josias and Ackee, and set out for Meizi’s in Rum Town.
They took the usual route to town, and found themselves at the edge of the port town.
They took the usual route to town, and found themselves at the edge of the port town.
Rum Town was buzzling with street vendors who were lining the streets selling all sorts of goods from the island’s famous Fuzzy Herb to many gold sugar products.
The two women took caution to walking around the streets, due to the place’s infamous reputation for being a violent haven for pirates. Residents and the less savory pirate visitors were checking out vending stands, or in a few cases getting into a fight with one another.
However, pirates were not only the problem, but also slavers made their home finding a way to kidnap anyone unlucky to fall into their clutches.
Just then there was a commotion coming in their direction and pedestrians were recoiling in fear, it was the site of a very large Fishman who looked to be two feet bigger than Josias. He was beaten all over, especially on his back where it seemed even his Dorsal fin was damaged and had a bomb collar around his neck. He was struggling to keep up his strength, and was reaching his good hand to plea.
“Please, help me, I just escaped from a sugar plantation, and I need to get this wretched thing off my- “he was cut off as a rock hit his head.
The pedestrians started throwing more and more rocks chanting, “Go away, monster” or “Go back to the plantations, Fish”.
Both sisters winced at the needless cruelty, and Madge was about to intervene until the shock collar was hit hard by one of the rocks and caused it to start ticking. A second the collar exploded, with the Fishman getting horrible burned in the process and finally fainting.
One of the pedestrians walked over to the fallen Fishman, and callously kicked and taunted him,” Not so mighty now are you, you freak of nature."
Causing the rest of the crowd to laugh and jeer at the fallen soul, like he was some sort of criminal who deserved this fate.
With no qualms about what she was going to do, Madge cried out “Powder Barrage”. And started creating multiple balls of powder and throwing them at civilians who cruelly took part in mocking the Fishman’s horrid situation.
“Hey, what’s going on”, said one bystander as he saw several other people freeze up.
“Yeah, why isn't anyone moving?”, another bystander wondered as well.
As Madge was ready to throw another powder ball, her sister grabbed her by the wrist and dragged her away from the scene.
“Hey, sis, what’s the big idea? I was just trying to show a little well deserved karma on these cretins”.
“What do you think would happen if they found you openly helping an escaped slave?” Wata questioned.
“It’s better than doing nothing, but being a bystander to cruelty”, Madge retorted.
“But how do you think we could have helped him, those collars can only come off if you are an expert at dismantling them or have the key."
“If that was Big Brother-Sensei instead of someone you didn’t know, you wouldn’t hesitate to help him”, she shouted as tears crept in her eyes.
This caused Wata to pause for a moment, and both looked back at the Fishman as he was now being carted back by some slave catchers. They observed his charred form, as he laid in his unconscious state. She imagined her husband in his place, and shivered at the thought of it all.
They then quietly continued to Meizi’s, all the while the escaped Fishman haunted their thoughts.
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Rasta Rock like Sabaody Archipelago has a slave based trade. The reason is because of the fact that it's known for it's gold sugar production, and it often times takes a lots of hands to work it. And as a result, the government has given Rasta Rock the leeway to practice slavery in order to help in it's sugar production and get rick off it's profits. Often times this has resulted in slave catchers kidnapping Fishmen due to their strength and edurance, and has made the island another place for Fishmen to avoid. Like with the citizens of Sabaody, a lot of the residents still see Fishmen and Merefolk as simply another type of fish.
Gold sugar to Rasta Rock is what White Amber was to Flevence, except for the fact it didn't slowly kill it's citizens. Gold sugar is like any sugar, but is golden in color and even shines like it if you put light to it. In Rasta Rock, citizens can be seen using gold sugar from alchoholic drinks to sweets, which are named after it's namesake Sugar.
Gold sugar to Rasta Rock is what White Amber was to Flevence, except for the fact it didn't slowly kill it's citizens. Gold sugar is like any sugar, but is golden in color and even shines like it if you put light to it. In Rasta Rock, citizens can be seen using gold sugar from alchoholic drinks to sweets, which are named after it's namesake Sugar.
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An underground study? Cool! ^^
It's nice how you mentioned the Ohara archaeologists.
My, that slave scene was so anguishing to read!
I don't think criminals would deserve such inhuman treatment either, but you're using the characters' point of view in the story I guess and that shows what harsh world they live in.
I like how Wata tries to protect her sister, but I also like Madge's sense of justice. In the slave scene both their points were valid, and things like this makes stories interesting.
I also enjoyed reading the extra info in the artist's comment; if i were you, though, I would try to include those info more in the actual story. Not all at once, of course, but whenever they fit the narration. You already did it a bit in these three chapters, but it would be nice to see more of this kind of background info.
That said, there are punctuation errors in this chapter too, but at this point I think you know what should be fixed.
In this chapter in particular though I noticed that you often put a period outside quotation masks at the end of dialogues. Periods and other marks should always be inside quotation marks, at the end of a dialogue line or more, not the other way around or both inside and outside of them.
Furthermore, there are a few lines that I suggest you to reword: "and wondered what the government could possibly hiding" should be "and wondered what the government could possibly be hiding"; "And did her best to give her some comfort" would read better as "She did her best to give her some comfort"; "and enthusiastically said" should be "and she enthusiastically said"; I would write "and sometimes wondered if it should be illegal for couples to be that affectionate to each other" as a separate period (for example, "Sometimes, she wondered if it should be illegal for couples to be that affectionate to each other."); "who looked to be 2 feet bigger than Josias" should be "who looked to be two feet bigger than Josias"; "And in another second the collar exploded" would read better as "A second later the collar exploded"; finally, "And the look at his charred form, as he laid in his unconscious state" would read better as "They observed his charred form, as he laid in his unconscious state."
It's nice how you mentioned the Ohara archaeologists.
My, that slave scene was so anguishing to read!
I don't think criminals would deserve such inhuman treatment either, but you're using the characters' point of view in the story I guess and that shows what harsh world they live in.
I like how Wata tries to protect her sister, but I also like Madge's sense of justice. In the slave scene both their points were valid, and things like this makes stories interesting.
I also enjoyed reading the extra info in the artist's comment; if i were you, though, I would try to include those info more in the actual story. Not all at once, of course, but whenever they fit the narration. You already did it a bit in these three chapters, but it would be nice to see more of this kind of background info.
That said, there are punctuation errors in this chapter too, but at this point I think you know what should be fixed.
In this chapter in particular though I noticed that you often put a period outside quotation masks at the end of dialogues. Periods and other marks should always be inside quotation marks, at the end of a dialogue line or more, not the other way around or both inside and outside of them.
Furthermore, there are a few lines that I suggest you to reword: "and wondered what the government could possibly hiding" should be "and wondered what the government could possibly be hiding"; "And did her best to give her some comfort" would read better as "She did her best to give her some comfort"; "and enthusiastically said" should be "and she enthusiastically said"; I would write "and sometimes wondered if it should be illegal for couples to be that affectionate to each other" as a separate period (for example, "Sometimes, she wondered if it should be illegal for couples to be that affectionate to each other."); "who looked to be 2 feet bigger than Josias" should be "who looked to be two feet bigger than Josias"; "And in another second the collar exploded" would read better as "A second later the collar exploded"; finally, "And the look at his charred form, as he laid in his unconscious state" would read better as "They observed his charred form, as he laid in his unconscious state."